Waiting for Morning

[jackshoegazer]

Fifteen minutes of destiny left
before the child must wake for school
and leave his pillow and self behind
on a bed he made without my help.

One last line, a refrain to sing
to pass the time and ease my mind
that I have made a long night's work
of progress, creative, intrepid worth.

It's not quite right and not enough
that I write these lines without a hook,
a wriggle of bait to catch myself
and the reader to reel us in.

Five more minutes and one more verse
is just enough for a second's remorse
to fall into rhyme and wonder why
I wrote this before the dawn had broke.


(C)2005 JJP

Comments

[kiwikat.livejournal.com]

that line about how he made the bed himself hits me perfectly. way to set the mood....

[antarcticlust.livejournal.com]

Kat stole me comment. But seriously, this run you're on is REALLY, REALLY good. The flow, the tone, it just captures that ephemeral moment incredibly well, which I'm always striving to do in my poems. Gorgeous. Really.