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[jackshoegazer]

misunderstood

he was talking over her
babbling, explaining.

she screamed.
"I'm an ocean, goddammit!"

he stopped, halted, confused.
"what?"

she said-
"but all you want to do is build castles in the sand
and leave footprints in the surf."

she walked out
and
closed the door.

Comments

[enodia.livejournal.com]

nice one.

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

Thanks. The scene popped into my head while listening to oldies radio.

[antarcticlust.livejournal.com]

I really, really love this. There's a lot going on - it almost makes a good flash fiction. It evokes a lot in so little, and "misunderstanding" really conveys the gulf between these two in terms of understanding. It made me sad to read it, because I've been there, and I was hoping there wasn't anything personal in this. :)

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

There isn't. It was just inspired by a song I heard.

[autumnhawk.livejournal.com]

"I'm the Ocean" by Neil Young????

Man, I hope I win this one.

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

Me no think so. I was listening to this oldies station WTUX 1550 AM "The Tux" that plays mostly old big-band things and Frank Sinatra, Perry Como and the like.

it's finally happened....

[mananath.livejournal.com]

...I have discovered a new "friend" on LJ who shares absolutely no mutual friends of you or I and yet her photo icons are filled with ones you created! You're famous!

Re: it's finally happened....

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

I know, I know :P

[smudged-mascara.livejournal.com]

You don't know me but if you wrote this poem I wanted you to know that I really liked it. You have talent

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I appreciate that. Thank you for taking the time to comment :)

[---four.livejournal.com]

i added you. i saw the icon you made of the family of skeletons standing in a pumpkin patch and it's just the greatest thing ever.

[jackshoegazer.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I believe I got that image from gettyimages.com

Welcome aboard!