I hope they lose a letter grade or something, that's screwed up.

Some of those sound okay, but the cabin one sounds really bad. MY CHARACTER GETS EVERYTHING THEY WANT EASILY, ISN'T LIKE PERFECT AND AWESOME? Yawn. They probably wrote that about themselves hoping it would be true and that no one would catch on.

Did they punctuate well? You could focus on that. Or their spelling, if that's well done. Or their choice of font! Times New Roman is very professional!